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Posted: Mon Mar 08, 2004 3:18 pm
by Joos
The firsttwo are nice. I am bit sceptic about the last one. Its not very artsy, only brutal. Brutality doesnt go well in poems methinks. But I guess thats just me.
Posted: Mon Mar 08, 2004 7:52 pm
by mxlm
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Posted: Mon Mar 08, 2004 9:32 pm
by Traind
Heh, brutality is best in poems, ever seen a John Woo movie? The violence is damned artful, poetic. Any tone fits in a poem, it's just a matter of expressing the tone you desire.
Andrew, good work. I took a Creative Writing class, which was probably the best thing I could have done my Sophomore year. Anyhow, the teacher had told me when I took Creative Writing 2 (which was really just a "editing" position for the School's literary magazine, a position that made me realize how few good writers exist in Highschool) that she had wanted to 'give my name to a counselor'. Something about 'pent up anger'. *shakes head* Some people are just a bit on the dumb side.
Again, good work,
-traind
Posted: Tue Mar 09, 2004 1:01 am
by Gauntlet-Dragon
Hm, you're damn brave Freak to bring that to your school. The poems are great, particularly the last two. Reminds me of when I was in art class, and drew a picture of someone being shot in the head (which was quite good with a lot of detail IMO) repetitivly, and I had shown it to this kid and laughed. Apparently he was "severly threatened" by the drawing and told the prinicpal. She searched my backpack and found the drawing, and I got suspended for a day.